Thursday, July 2, 2009

Meri Bandagi

After 6 months, I have written this ghazal on request of some friends who provoked me by saying that I was a stain on romanticism.:D
This is my first try at writing hardcore urdu and romanticism in a ghazal.
I have written the meanings of urdu words along with the lines for you to understand everything.
Dedicated to these friends and their partners (gfs and bfs) for whom they are going to paste this poem as their own,
Presenting MERI BANDAGI

Teri nazar ki shuaaon ka, ek qatraa ye aaftaab,
Teri aankh se hain feeke, in samandaron ke khwaab,

Tere lafz may ke pyaale, teri guftagu kamaal,
kisi gam-zadaa ko kar den, ye halaawatein halaal.

Teri muskaan aap-tashreeh, rukhsaar hayat-o-pak,
Tera rom rom shabnam, palak daira ufaaq,

Tu dildaar, tu dil band, tu dil doz, dil sitaaaan,
mein dil soz , dil nawaaz, hua diida-e-hairaaaan.

Teri zulf ki ye chhanv, tabassum ki si rakshandagi,
Hai guroor wafa pe teri, apne dhab pe sharmindagi,

Tera husn bepanaah, tera naam kash-e-zindagi.
Kar maaf meri khuda, meri khata-e-zist-e-bandagi.


(shuaaon = lights, aaftaab = sun,
gam-zadaa
= A sad person, halawatein = sweetness,
chhanv = shadow,
aap-tashreeh = self explanatory, hayat-o-pak = pure as elixir,
daira ufaq
= skyline where earth and sky seem to meet,
dil-band = attractive. dil-doz = heart piercing, dil-sitaan = lover, dil-soz = passionate, dil nawaaz = Lenient, diida-e-hairaan = blind to everything else
tabassum = smile, rakshandagi = radiance, dhab = way of loving,
Khata-e-zist-e-bandagi = mistakes in my way of worshipping you throughout my life kash-e- zindagi = Desired puff of life )

तेरी नज़र की shuaaon का एक कतरा ये आफताब,
तेरी आँख से हैं फीके, इन समन्दरों के ख्वाब,

तेरे लफ्ज़ मय के प्याले, तेरी गुफ्तगू कमाल,
किसी गम-ज़दा को कर दें, ये हलावतें हलाल.

तेरी मुस्कान आप-तशरीह, रुखसार hयात-ओ-पाक,
तेरा रोम रोम शबनम, पलक दायिरा उफाक,

तू दिलदार, तू दिल बंद, तू दिल दोज़, दिल सिताँ,
में दिल सोज़ , दिल नवाज़, हुआ दीदा-ए-हैराँ.

तेरी ज़ुल्फ़ की ये छाँव, तबस्सुम की सी रक्षन्दगी ,
है गुरूर वफ़ा पे तेरी, अपने धाब पे शर्मिंदगी,

तेरा हुस्न बेपनाह, तेरा नाम कश-ए-ज़िन्दगी.
कर माफ़ मेरी खुदा, मेरी खता-ए-ज़ीस्त-ए-बंदगी.

16 comments:

tamanna said...

straight to d soul... beautiful thots.. keep up ur gud wrk

Vikram said...

lot of urdu .. cudnt understnd much but seems pretty good and meaning full ... nice to hear ... keep up ...

priya said...

Aah! You the ‘Monarch of poetries man...Wel its quiet fishy it really needs prompting and stimulating thoughts in oneself.
Newaz its fantastic and dazzling too.actuly its different 4m rest of all stuffed ghazal...

Anonymous said...

Pretty good.This time you chose to keep the theme simple but make the words complex.Yet more works are awaited!

Pradeep ۩۞۩ with Little Kingdom ۩۞۩ said...

waah waah...good one...high node on urdu....i would like to have its hindi version...hoping you'll do something for that as well...

Good poetic sense...nice efforts....keep it up Gaurav..!!

Ami aggu. said...
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Ami aggu. said...

As much as I understand your philanthropic faculties, you should have left the english meanings for later. Having to wade through the square brackets, keeping track of how the last line ended, breaks quite the flow.

That said, it took some deep breaths for me to connect it all up and gobble it down. Pretty articulate of you. But, I think it is too short for a romantic ghazal.

You absol-fooking-utely rock @ these gripping subtleties. Waiting for more!

Yo Patel! (Shrug! That was not me.)

Priti said...

chimerical lines made hold spell bound.Gently Your poesy hit like ton of bricks and this time u threw a curve which strike dumb with its own syrup (Complete anesthetic).For this exquisite creation "Floss on romanticism.
Keep on truckin'

Kharageous said...

thnx Tamanna and Vikram,

Kharageous said...

@ Priya,

"Monarch of poetries"....loved that title

@ Pradeep ji, thank you, I will try to write something like that in hindi as well..

Kharageous said...

@Aggu,
done. Thnks for the advice..

@Priti,
your comment is more difficult than the poem, thanks a lot.

Vikram Rathi said...

insha-allah!!
boy's doing well (inzi style)
"yeh tere khat ki syaahi,
hai meri jawaani, hai meri kahaani,
khatam ho jaaye to le mere aansu,
yehi meri kahani hai meri jubaani"

Varun Prakash said...

Godly.......

ज़ाकिर अली ‘रजनीश’ said...

बहुत सुंदर भाव, अगर आप इसे हिन्दी लिपि में लिखते तो और मजा आता।
-Zakir Ali ‘Rajnish’
{ Secretary-TSALIIM & SBAI }

Anonymous said...

I loved your ghazal. I do read people like faiz, majaz lakhnawi and josh malihabadi and I do have an understanding of urdu poetry. Your ghazal is very good. It seems you live somewhere close to Lucknow?

Anonymous said...

Very nice khalib!! ;-)